Monday, November 27, 2006

Writer's Diary #13- Untitled (or Conclusion) editted

When    I    lived
up North
I saw snow
mounds as dead;
corpses quilted
in heavy white.

Down South
these graves (and mine) would go
if not for the footprints
of millions.

Just a small change. "In the North" was changed to "up North". Primarily, this is to keep the two stanzas more cohesive. But I also like how up/down fits more with the message I'm trying to convey.

As you can tell, I'm considering the title, "Conclusion" as well.

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