Friday, July 13, 2007

Poetry Friday: Tanka Challenge


I took part in one of these a while ago, and it was fun, so I thought I'd steal the idea. I've written a haiku below, and the challenge is for you to turn it into a tanka. All you have to do is simply add another 2 lines, 7 syllables each. Oh, and feel free to come up with a title as well!

The ladybug moved
along the crease – the lifeline-
of my open palm

9 comments:

Ted said...

The ladybug moved
along the crease – the lifeline-
of my open palm
It spelled out the words 'you will die'
It was Friday the thirteenth.

I guess that would qualify as a horror tanka.

MyUtopia said...

Happy Friday the 13th!

cloudscome said...

The ladybug moved
along the crease – the lifeline-
of my open palm

joyful on this salty trail
waving black thread antena

Barbara Bruederlin said...

The ladybug moved
along the crease – the lifeline-
of my open palm
I yelped when it bit my palm
and squished it against the wall.

John Mutford said...

Ted: Since you're not a frequent visitor to my blog, yes, yours scared me...just a little ;)

MyUtopia: Same to you. And since your addition was seven syllables short, I hope that doesn't mean tragedy befell you before you completed it.

Clousdscome: I like the black thread image.

Barbara: This is the second Poetry Friday in a row in which an insect has met with an untimely death. Should we be worried about reincarnation?

Kelly Fineman said...

The ladybug moved
along the crease – the lifeline-
of my open palm
She sped across years in haste
As if her house was burning

John Mutford said...

Kelly, Awesome allusion to the "Ladybug, ladybug" nursery rhyme. Connects perfectly with the "lifeline".

Rob Hardy said...

The ladybug moved
along the crease - the lifeline -
of my open palm:
There's a ticking at the sill
There's a swallow, there's a calm

(apologies to Colin Meloy)

John Mutford said...

Rob: No Decemberists fan need apologize here my friend! Nice add-on.