Levels of Naiveté:(early draft)
The realization hit him
hard: tossing a green salad
meant she was thinking
about dad.
(His dad had hit a lettuce
farmer’s truck- head on.
It was the happiest day
of her life.)
The realization hit him
hard: tossing a green salad
meant she was thinking
about dad.
-----by John Mutford
6 comments:
This made me laugh. Good start.
Thanks Allison, Glad to see you haven't left the blogging world altogether!
Oh, good. I'm glad we were meant to laugh, because I did. And then I sort of gasped and covered my mouth.
I'd like to see later drafts. This ...is ...interesting!
There is something very satisfying about this work.
Tadmack: Perfect reaction!
Barbara: Thanks. Satisfying's good!
That's a lot of hits. Pretty damned brilliant. And now I'm hungry.
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